Such a long build-up. So much potential. As it turns out, it amounts to nothing. The original conflict is completely absurd. If I have to believe it then we are dealing with very immature and mean h/h. The resolution is more like a farce. The third and fourth wheels or whatever are inserted and pulled off like afterthoughts. Your wicked ways reads like a soap opera, a bad one at that.
2/5
Read it for yourself.
